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WIP - it's me who changed... by kamism WIP - it's me who changed... by kamism
Ah so this piece is sort of special and it's supposed to represent a lot about me. I mean its open to interpretation and urgh, the heart thing is a little overrated. But only I know why I did it ; v ;
I'm just trying to get rid of my art block. Drew this while I was watching :iconfelixavenier: on LS :icontearplz: she's such a motivater because she is perfection.
I've been procracinating a lot OTL

I wasn't too sure if I should upload this >A< maybe it should be kept quiet in my folder.

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It kind of looks like this is a work-in-progress but I'll talk about it assuming it's finished.

Let's start with vision.
To begin with, you obviously have a beautiful picture in your head and I wouldn't dare say you haven't communicated it. On the other hand I only give you a 4.5 because it looks like a speed paint you really didn't take too much time on. I'll further explain...

This is unique so I give you a 5 on originality. The colors work well and although the color scheme has been used many times before to communicate a dramatic idea the overall concept I have yet to see. Your character appears to be randomly standing in a body of water with a distant stare. To me this portrays an almost hopeless feel, like there's nothing much left for this recently apathetic character to do besides spending some time in an unconventional place that possibly holds great prominence sometime within their life. This is common idea portrayed in a unique fashion.

I give you a 2.5 on technique, reasons that might explain your 4.5 in vision. I am confused by this picture because although it's portrayed in a unique fashion, the portrayal is sloppy. This picture is a mess. What originally appeared to me as a body of water has a slanted circular wave while your character is upright and back of the water is also upright.
I think those are red fish? Possibly blood? Those red things around the character are something and you can't tell what.
The strokes you used vary in size and density and while that's something to aim for your placement leaves questions for your ability to shade and use value. It's blotchy.
Your technique might have worked a bit better if you'd put more effort into smoothing out the brush differences. Where your brush strokes begin and end should not be the first thing I notice, and it was for this picture.
The anatomy is horrible. One shoulder is broader than the other but similar in size while it appears you tried some side-view perspective, which makes this picture's anatomy contradict itself. The neck is disturbingly long and stiff. The character does not mesh well with the environment they are so stiff.
Their head doesn't leave much to be desired, it's way too narrow for a slightly turned profile. It also seems you made the head about as big as the shoulders themselves and if that's the design, I suggest your character seek medical attention. The hair looks like a quick try at being stringy, which might have worked better if the head was a bit less oblong.
I give what points I do on technique because out of all the horrible shading in this picture the face looks great, the eyes are beautiful, and the water/liquid in the very back was well done.
Again though, the angles are probably what killed the score I gave you.

Impact is last.
I give you a 4. It's dramatic, I give you that. But you used very few colors and very little contrast that the character, assuming the character is the focus, blends in with the rest of the picture. From far off, I would guess this was random slur of grey and red.
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Skerppla Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
asdfghjkl so prettyyyyh!~ :la:
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Digiridoo Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I see. It's like you're putting your heart out there. *Bad Pun intended*

I Just like how he looks bored with it all.
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Blueroses321 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
o.o This is beautiful and unique.
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Akiyata Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa....that's so cool :la: Keep it up! Can't wait to see the finished version.
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AngelMarieTuran Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really can't express my emotions for this picture in any way that would actually relay them properly, but I just have to say a few things. One, I really, really love this. I can see the amount of feeling and thought you put into this picture. I can tell that what it symbolizes is very important and meaningful for you, and that's my favorite thing to see in a picture. Its rare to find someone that can relay themselves in their work as much as you did in this one. Secondly, I could tell right away that the fish were in fact fish, just in case you were worried about that. I also realize that this is a WIP, and you're still working on it, so really... it can only get better from here. For a WIP I think its fantastic. The colors, the lighting, they add to the emotions of the character and overall image so much. I'm really really looking forward to seeing the final version of this, Kami. Hnn, you did well <3
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Solomon-love Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
But this is so amazingly awesome please keep it shared :iconcryforeverplz:
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gayteirs Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Sexy. eue
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Nigsia Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You sometimes need to show how you are (the way you think I guess). Sometimes you just have to draw what you need to. So.. don't be shy to share it with us. Btw, I like it really much, so, don't be afraid to upload next one (if there is a next one : P).
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anpati92 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
I think it's very expressive and shows a lot about you. You don't need to hide what you feel :P
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kamism Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
;_; I'm just worried that my watchers would be like "wtf is she drawing..." but yes, I have a reason to why I felt that way and I tried to find a way to portray it :D
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