[OC] Atsuka Raiden

Overall, he's very very well done! Warning, I'm kinda harsh when it comes to critique!!
So please don't get butthurt <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/m/m…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title="Meow :3"/>
Don't take these things to heart, I'm not judging you, but I didn't hold back.

You might be thinking, "WHY TOKI, WHY? WHY DID YOU GIVE ME SUCH BAD SCORES?!?!"
Calm down.
Let me explain the scores I gave you.

I gave you 4 stars in vision because, he's well done! The hair flows nicely with the color of the mask, and the necklace with his tie. The colors are well balanced, and it gives an overall glow to the picture.

Originality. I only gave you 2 and a half stars because, while he's well done, this type of style has been done over and over again. The gas mask is nothing different, though I love the details on it, but neither is the biohazard warning. So the overall feel of the character seems.... Well, already done.
Suggestions: Try a different biohazard logo. Heck! Make up your own one, with it's own symbols and words that mean Biohazard! Be creative, don't regurgitate what other people have done.

Technique, I gave three. While he's balanced out well colorwise, he's a manga character. The style of manga is very precise in it's lines, as is the shading. Does that mean that your shading and lines aren't good? No! That's not what I'm saying at all!! It just doesn't feel very defined, and I wouldn't have guessed it was manga.
Also, have a very definite light source. From this picture, I wouldn't know where it was. There also needs to be more color/shading on the cheekbones, they're very pale.
Also, the hood, blatantly, isn't well done. It's blocky and undefined, and it doesn't really look like a good. It just kind of awkwardly sits,out of place with the definition that's executed in the rest of the character. On top of that the Biohazard sticker doesn't blend with it, which would suggest that you pulled it straight from google and slapped it on without blending it with the actual fabric.
Suggestion: Work on the manga style of art more, and more definite lines. Add more dirt to the face, it balances out with the dirt on the neck. Work on the choker as well. While it's well done, it's hard to define that it's a choker.
Overall, just work on straightening out the lines, or don't categorize it as manga.

Impact, was a 2.
Just based on the overall-ness of the picture, he doesn't leave all that much to be desired.
He draws a some questions such as, "Why is he wearing a gas mask?" and "What's going on with this character?" But overall, it doesn't draw the immensely. While it's intriguing to most, people who know Fallout 3 and Romantically Apacalytic, or taken an interest in the idea of a Post-Apocalyptic Earth, we're not all that intrigued. We generally know the story, and the idea behind it.
Suggestion: Make weird symbols. Give him obvious powers or tattoos, especially ones that have meaning. If you give him a tattoo of a crow, it doesn't beg a lot of questions, especially in a Post Apocalyptic setting. Give him weird symbols, something that draws the eye and makes people stop and think twice when they pass his picture.
Make him someone YOU want to explore, rather then just creating a character.

Okay, so I hope that wasn't to harsh, though I'm glad it was.
I'm really a nice person, honest!!

I also apologize if the comic itself it's Post Apocalyptic, that's what it screamed at me though :3
If you want good ideas on just really weird creative Post Apocalyptic scenery and stuff, take a look at Romantically Apacalyptic. It's weird and storyline is hard to follow, but it's pretty legit.

So, take or reject my critique, that's what I have for you, and again, I hope you forgive me on the account that I just ripped your character into pieces and rejected most of it ^.^"

But, I hope this helped!! Ridiculously long review, over!! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="21" height="15" alt="" title="I am a dummy!"/>